Friday, May 08, 2009

Drabble


A few months back, I discovered the beauty and challenge of a drabble. A drabble is a work of fiction exactly one hundred words in length (title of the story included). As Kris made me understand, the purpose of a drabble is brevity, and it is a real test of an author's ability to express [hopefully] interesting and meaningful ideas in an extremely confined space. I had promised to try this out and here is my first attempt.

Except
The two sat on a red cushioned chair. They ordered two cappuccinos. They discussed politics, places they wanted to see, several friends, a few foes, films, music, books, weather, past, future, nothing important, everything trivial. Once or twice he flirted, she blushed. He teased and she pretended to be angry. Failing to put on an act she burst into peals of laughter. The waiter brought the steaming hot cups to the table. They stopped talking for a few seconds as if they were keeping a secret. Once he left, they resumed the never-ending conversation and spoke of everything, except

19 comments:

fatoori said...

:) very interesting..d flow is dere..the end left me at some kind of an edge (i guess thats wot it was intended 2 do)..is it a technical fault (so to say), that this drabble consists of 99 words and not 100 (or u r counting the dots 2?)

Priyanka Khot said...

Fatoori: You forget that the title is an integral part of any story. Pls do a re-count. :-)

And knowing me you should know that although I hate Amir Khan, I am a perfectionist myself!

fatoori said...

oh come on..i dont think d title qualifies as a part of the word limit of the actual story..but m nt sure, ds it?

Priyanka Khot said...

of course it does...

you can check out Kris' post that I have linked in my blog.

fatoori said...

oki!! it does :)

Kris said...

I do like this one. Is it a true story perhaps...?

vIpIn said...

Hmmm nice one. But Why this "Jhumpa Lahiri" style ending. I mean things left to the understanding/assumptions of reader. I love this style but it leaves the reader like me disturbed about thinking what is that I dnt know ???

vIpIn said...

"except" part would have been - how to get away without paying the bill ??

rahul said...

nice one ..with a tinge of mystery!!!

Priyanka Khot said...

@ Fatoroi: I am glad you gave up :P

Priyanka Khot said...

@ Kris: Its not a true story. But I am glad you thought so. Makes me a convincing fiction writer. :-)

Priyanka Khot said...

@ Vipin: It nice to exercise the brains once in a while. :-) Think what they might have wanted to say.

I think the Bill part is funny...

Priyanka Khot said...

@ Rahul: I think mystery is good, don't you?

rahul said...

yup, love it!!

Indrajit said...

Hi

Thats grt!!

Never heard abt this b4.

Keep enlightening all of us...

chk my blog too pillij..

yamini said...

I am impressed.
Pri, u are definitely going from strength to strength. More power to you....

Little Girl Lost said...

i loved the ending priyanka- deliciously vague :)

Scribbler said...

Whoa! What an imagery except...

vipin said...

K....I feel may be the same thing to which Esha replies "sochti hoon" in this video [ http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=LZYUSUrskVQ ]

Scratching my head again for what Ajay would have asked? not sure what ? but certainly not about switching over to Tata Indicom. :-)